Judge: Jurgen Lobert Total Score: 22
Almost a formal portrait, except I assume the light was applied by the photographer.
It is difficult to light paint models without them moving during what is likely a long exposure. The chest is a bit blurred, which would be OK, but it is the brightest part, hence, leading the eye right to it. This can be darkened, but what takes away from the image is the dark eye on the right. If there had been more light in the model's left eye, the image would have been much stronger.
Also, add a bit more clarity to make the image pop.